As stated in the earlier post, my essay was a rough draft. Two students and the Professor read the essay; commenting and marking it up. All readers stated the enjoyment of it, they all pointed toward the first paragraph as the one that they found powerful or striking grabbing their attention from the get go…

But, the best part of that day… The Professor walked into the room, looked directly at me and said: “James, your a real writer.”

Now, I edit my own work… removing “to be” verbs… fixing or removing entire paragraphs… changing a few pronouns… ad infinitum.